smrr's CC 2 |

[John]

It's sad to know that you're probably sitting out the next CC. In the early part of the competition, you're thread was one of the few threads that made me go like "Holy shit, I better bring something as good as these guys to the table". Jesus, those pencil sketches are gorgeous. Thanks for that kick in the ass.

Now that that's out of the way. Here's my quick overpaint and critique.




Changes:
*Added more rim lights to take advantage of the light source behind the subject.
*Made leg larger because of perspective distortion.
*I broke the lamp found at the lower right side of the piece because it grabbed my attention more than it should. I'm sure there's a fix if you really wanted the lamp to be there.
*Turned off the lamp on the left.
*A little bit of light showing through feathers.

Stylistic changes:
*Made your darkest darker, and lightest lighter.
*Tinted your background a bit with more saturation.

Comments:
I wasn't quite sure what was shooting out of Henry's hip, so I decided not to comment on that. I just think it looks cool. I like the way Henry is about to crash into the camera. I am a huge sucker for that storytelling device because I envy those who pull the perspective distortion off nicely. Stylistically speaking, I quite like the exaggeration you did. I love how you rendered water. I played around with the colors but don't get me wrong, I like your color choices. And the Henry the Raven design looks killer. 

As to your question of "does it hit the mood of Bloodborne". It does, or at least it was going into that direction like how Animatrix still feels like the Matrix. That strong but different artistic interpretation, but the gist is there. I only wish you were given more time to better shape your illustration up into the world of Bloodborne. Probably a few pillars, a few overgrown vines, a happy dead NPC floating on that body of water or anything that can help tie it back to that world.