Dino's CC WIP(S)
Hello people,
I watched the stream(due to my timezone it's hard to watch it live.)
Amit and Piotr thanks for all the kind words despite my unfinished work.
So I finished it just in time before CC2 :)

Hey man, it looks great! Could be the cover of an Arya & The Hound comic book ^^ they're really recognisable as who they're supposed to be and breaking out of the panel gives it a larger than life, in your face feeling. The character designs are great too, and its a nice contrast with his angularity and the more soft shapes of her (could be pushed a bit more maybe?). The little paint spatter effects are nice too to break up the linearity of that kind of drawing.

The thing that is confusing is that the needle from her arm connects right to the hilt of his sword, when I first looked I thought it was like a leash, since she is kind of like his prisoner when they are together. I realised it wasn't after looking more carefully but the first read made me think that. Other thing that could improve it is varying line weights - thick lines going to thin as they recede into the distance (illustrator is really good for adding those kind of variations and keeping things consistent), or even just using a thicker line around their silhouettes to clearly separate them (like if you removed all the colour and value do the elements still separate easily? This could also help clear the confusion about her needle overlapping him instead of attaching to him if there is a thicker line weight around it).

Looking forward to seeing your next entry in CC2 ^^

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Hey Jonny!
Thankyou for your kind advice, Ah I totally miss the needle sword thing. My Intent was to lead the flow of reading since arya is 1st read face then her arm then goes to the hound, maybe I should move this sword?
As for line weight I will try to be more aware of it onwards, practice practice haha.
Nice nice nice nice. I'm so glad you finished it. Piotr and I will leave some crits for you, a bit later. :)

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That's some wicked armor design on that guy in the back. Props for finishing it!

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wow very cool, I can tell who they are straight away, prob one of my favs...
Dino, Piotr and I did a short crit of your piece after announcement on the CC 2 stream on Twitch. Check it out.

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@John&Slash Thankyou for you kind words!
@Amit and Piotr thanks I'd check it out now :)

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