06-06-2020, 03:16 AM
New here,
Great sketchbook! Especially a fan of the latest storyboard/comic page!! Has a very Heavy Metal Magazine feel!
First panel establishes the setting, second the character, third the foe, fourth action! Great pacing!
I feel like the first panel has a bit of overlapping focus and is a little weak because of it. The swordgun and the cave/shelter are struggling for attention. Maybe subdue the focus on the swordgun in the first panel, and bring it to prominence in the second panel? Making the character less the focus, such as cropping at the neck making them faceless, could help make the weapon a greater focus too. Making the character faceless also could help make them more mysterious and interesting, like the Master Chief in the Halo franchise!
Keep up the great work!
Great sketchbook! Especially a fan of the latest storyboard/comic page!! Has a very Heavy Metal Magazine feel!
First panel establishes the setting, second the character, third the foe, fourth action! Great pacing!
I feel like the first panel has a bit of overlapping focus and is a little weak because of it. The swordgun and the cave/shelter are struggling for attention. Maybe subdue the focus on the swordgun in the first panel, and bring it to prominence in the second panel? Making the character less the focus, such as cropping at the neck making them faceless, could help make the weapon a greater focus too. Making the character faceless also could help make them more mysterious and interesting, like the Master Chief in the Halo franchise!
Keep up the great work!