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Looking good! Composition is very dynamic, feel like a scene straight out of a movie. Hope to see more progress!
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Hey man ! Great job with the last 2 concepts, I feel like you conveyed their personality well! I feel the military illustration should have softer edges as further as it goes to the background, there are some edges there which are as hard as the FG elements. Also congrats ! :)
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Hi Zorrentos personally if i had any comment it probably about the lettering in the secret valley piece i don't know exactly how big it really going to be but i think people shouldn't have to click on a image to read anything but that my personal opinion.I find the descriptive to small but kinda i feel like you had reason here since there so much stuff on the page.But i than read that this a personal project so you can do pretty much whatever you want which for me would probably mean splitting up some element and grouping some for example i would take the 2 big character and put them as a turn around with the text and the props would be on there own as well as the expression sheet.I would probably also move the logo more toward the extreme left if in every piece since i think it as alot of important to let the viewer know about what the name of the project.
One other advise i might have is don't over use rim light choose where you want the attention to be let place for the eye to rest that what create flow toward your focal point.
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So the rim light looks a bit out of place in the military scene as one , where is it coming from ? And two, it's only on the characters and not the rocks on the ground near them . I think machine gun fire can cause some orangey rimlight unless that's something I'm making up due to videogames ? So if you draw some of that happening in the mid ground then you can also get some coloured lighting going for extra visual interest. If it looks better with the rim light just on those characters then fair enough
Also it seems like they're in a sandy , dusty place so you could make parts of the smog be more yellow and heavier to create a sense of depth and add colour variation. And I second what hristov said about edge control , although I'd add that if you have time you could also vary the edges within each main character too.
Last thing to add would be more colour hue variation (and possibly saturation and value variation as well )within each "element". Take the background wall in the right. Leaving out texture , it's all the same base colour. Some very subtle colour gradient manually painted in on a diagonal helps make it seem less "digital " . Same could also apply to the characters , the foreground wall, the ground , the rocks etc. I think this is less important for character art though.
I do tend to do more painterly stuff though so some of this might not be revelant for the style you're going for. It's a great piece , very dynamic with the sense that there's a lot of stuff going on around them. And congrats on the job!
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man as always your analyses under your studies are really well thought ! now i wanna see you applying them into tons of illustration/ designs/ whatever from mind !
