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I really like the look of darkness with a splash of red and light. The character is intriguing, and the whole setup engages curiosity as to what she is doing.
I don't see anything wrong with it, but maybe what would balance it would be to have the octopus head shifted a bit to the right, and looking to the left (into the frame, and aimed at the figure). Then you'd have the nice foreground tentacle framing the lower left, and the head/eyes sort of framing the upper right background.
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I like the sketch. You might try developing or moving the creature to the right. Basically, give it visual room to run into the frame, rather than have it in the middle, kinda running out of the frame. Or maybe you
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Or maybe you could leave it there if you added another creature in the background on the right, making a triangle formation. Someone told me once that having odd numbers of things placed around the frame (birds, spaceships, characters in an action scene) tended to work better for composition.
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I like your progress. Your rendering of light is always interesting.
First sketch was way more dynamic and interesting imo with those large diagonals of the city in the background, and why the ref image works. Judge and analyse your comps by their major rhythms, these dictate the feel and read of your piece. Always refer back to the original sketch or inspiration if you're losing way.
Please try and go past your normal inclination and add some finishing to something. You are leaving all of these things mostly in a sketch state. That's fine for practice...but you are also training yourself to not finish anything if that's all you do. You will become a master unfinisher :)
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Oh wow, I really like how that jackal painting is coming! The color is really rich. Definitely keep that one up.
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